Pg. 136 Act. 2

The campus parking lot is dangerous at night.

At night its dangerous enough due to not able to look as well as in the day. But in a campus parking lot it becomes more dangerous. For it has more people mugging, killing, rape, and kidnapping due to that advantage it has. And not many people help others at night than in day due to feeling its all a trap or just a trick to rob them. And its more open so on place to hide when someone is chasing you.

At night it is dangerous enough due to the inconvenience off not seeing as well as in the day. But in a campus parking lot it becomes even more dangerous. For it has more people mugging, killing, rape, and kidnapping due to the advantage it provides. And not many people are eager to help others at night with the fear of helping and get mugged or just a ruse to kidnap them. And with the parking lot being more open the hiding spots are limited or none at all.

Page 107 Act. 3

Problems:

• Intro paragraph provides to many short sentences that can easily be combined.
• Need to chance the use of some words in sentences.
• Elimination of useless sentences that have nothing to do with paragraphs
• Don't get side track talking on subjects that don't have anything to with the paragraph

The Extended School Day (revised)

    Imagine an innocent seven-year-old whose parents work until five each night. And upon returning to house usual with parents ready to greet and ask her how did the said day went she finds that she is on her own. With the ever present danger of being left alone its is said enough that one enough of these "latchkey" children is something that a solution must be found. One suggestion, beneficial to both sides, is that to keep the elementary schools open longer than they are.

    Parents wouldn't have to be in a state of uneasiness about whether their child is safe and happy at home. They wouldn't have to worry about whether their child's needs are being met. They also wouldn't have to feel guilty because they are not able to help their child with their homework. The longer day would make it possible for the teacher to provide such help. Extended school hours would also relieve families of the financial burden of hiring a home sitter. As my family learned, having a sitter can put a hole in the pocket. And having a sitter doesn't necessarily eliminate all problems. Parents still have the hassle of worrying whether the person will show up and be reliable.
    Even so, the longer school day would benefit children as well. Obviously, the dangers of their being home alone after school would disappear because by the time the bus dropped them off after the longer school day, at least one parent would be home. The unnameable horrors feared by parents would not have a chance to happen. Instead, the children would be in school, under trained supervision. There, they would have a chance to work on subjects that give them trouble. In contrast, when my younger brother had difficulty with subtraction in second grade, he had to struggle along because there wasn't enough time to give him the help he needed.
    The longer day would also give children a chance to participate in extracurricular activities. They could join a science club, play on a softball team, sing in a school chorus, take an art class. Because school districts are trying to save money, they often cut back on suck extracurricular activities. They don't realize how important such experiences are.
    Finally, the longer school day would also benefit teachers. Having more hours in each day would relieve them of a lot of pressure. This longer workday would obviously require schools to increase teachers' pay. The added salary would be an incentive for teachers to stay in the profession.
    Implementing an extended school day would be expensive, but I feel that many communities would willingly finance its costs because it provides benefits to parents, children, and even teachers. Young children, home alone, wondering whether to watch another TV show or to wander outside to see what's happening, need this longer school day now.

Supporting thesis with evidence

All of us can take steps to reduce the country's trash crisis.

• Purpose: Make more people aware of the growing crisis that is happening every day
• Audience: the people
• Tone: Pleading and Telling
• Point of View: First Person

1. Parks covered in trash 
2. trash cans overflowing
3. people houses trapped in trash

Out of entire globe, America has the worst trash problem to date than any other country. There once was a time where u could walk to the park and view the clean, trash free park, but now if you go to the park in the middle of the day it is covered in trash with people not carry on the very ground the walk on. Or others that see this but dare not to do anything in spite of looking different or "odd". It has now become a chore than a helping hand to our environment with this trash epidemic.

Revising Activity

As I drove down the street in my bright blue sports car, I saw a car dashing around the curve. As the light turned yellow then red, the car didn't even hesitate at the motion of the changing lights. A young couple, very beautiful as if they were models, started crossing the street. As the woman saw the car, she yelled to her husband. He leaped onto the shoulder. The man who seemed with only little scrapes but, realising, the woman was in mortal danger. I ran to a nearby emergency phone and called the police. The ambulance arrived, but the woman was already. dead. The driver, who looked terrible, failed the sobriety test, and the police found out that he had two previous offenses. It's apparent that better ways have to be found for getting drunk drivers off the road.

Article Activity

   When I visited yahoo to view the new news, my attention was caught by an article published there called "How to Catch a Liar". The article, based of the quiz "Can you Spot a Liar", it was published by Reader's Digest Magazine but without having a name I could have no telling who exactly wrote the article.
   Its introduction was below average at best it really didn't "grab" at me. The main point of the article is simply what the article title said how to catch a liar by using 7 different methods.
   The points in the article were clear and understandable. The information on this article was very different  to what i expect. I learned that just by following there breathing patterns, of the change from slow to fast that chance are that he/she is hiding something. Mostly likely the surprising part of the whole article is the method of just if the question is simple or embarrassing like if someone avoids your gaze  when u ask just a simple question you should be suspicious.